Uncyclopedia:Proofreading Service/archive1

Welcome to the archives of the Proofreading Service. Here you can find the full comments attached to previously proofread articles. ^_^

Templates and other bits and bobs

BeenProofread Template

Well I was bored today and figured a way to possibly advertise the service. Whenever we proofread an article we should paste this template, {{BeenProofread}} onto the owner of the articles page. Here's what it looks like:

The Proofreading Service has proofreaded your article. Like it? Need more proofreading? Click here!

 I know I ripped off the old template, but oh well.  =P  Hope this helps! 
-Scout JoshHJ's Page and His Talk 23:15, 29 May 2007 (UTC)  Edit: Well it looks like the links don't work, but they do work on all other pages.  I don't know why they don't work on this one...

Links to the page they are on dont show up, its ok :)

Thanks for that btw, thats a really cute little template and could definately be useful. However, I'd recommend putting it on the talk pages rather than the actual article, as it doesn't really relate to users page as we have many very prolific writers here who have several of their articles proofread. Also with wikis being mass collaboration tools, there is often several ppl working on an article, so the articles talk page would be a more relevant place to attach it.

Also, usually we don't "tick" pages as done til the original author has had a chance to say they are happy with it!

I really love how the Uncyc community have gotten behind this project and contribute things like this! Makes me so proud :) ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 11:54, 29 May 2007

Oh I know, I meant the talk page of the user or the article. Though the talk page of the article would be better I see now. I never meant the actual article though. That'd overdue it. --Scout JoshHJ's Page and His Talk 00:06, 30 May 2007 (UTC)

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UnBooks:Practical Lessons on Communism

The kids speak kidspeak, but Teacher, the narrator and Dexter should speak polite English. Could you please? -- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 23:42, 4 May 2007 (UTC)

Certainly! I'll be along to tidy it up post haste! Ceridwyn^talk _contribs ^arc2.0 11:52, 04 May 2007

Well, /dusts hands I think thats about done. Let me know if you agree with the edits. I tidied up Teacher's grammar quite a bit and there may be a few tiny tweaks here and there to make it read more smoothly. Hope its ok! Ceridwyn^talk _contribs ^arc2.0 12:14, 05 May 2007

Very nice. The only thing I reverted was the "Yes, but" instead of the "Well," at the ending. I think the previous form was subtler. Here, a token of recognition:

NeedABrain has awarded you a test tube! ...for nice fixes on P.L.O.C.
Don't worry, it's just Jägermeister (hiccup)... Zheers!

-- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 00:33, 5 May 2007 (UTC)

I saw the revert, and I agree, my edit made it sound like Communism was in fact, bad! /gasp! Ceridwyn^talk _contribs ^arc2.0 12:41, 05 May 2007 00:41, 5 May 2007 (UTC)

Of course I think Communism is horrible, but maybe it's more clever not stating this so clearly. Saying "Communism is horrible" indirectly is the function of the whole article. ;) -- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 00:44, 5 May 2007 (UTC)

Ssssshh don't let the Premier hear you saying that! Ceridwyn^talk _contribs ^arc2.0 12:48, 05 May 2007

Can you keep a secret? He is a double agent, incumbed to mock communism. Message self-destructing in 10... 9... 8... -- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 00:55, 5 May 2007 (UTC)

You're meant to wait til I answer if I can keep a secret or not! What if I'm actually an undercover operative for a pro-Communist movement. Clearly I won't keep the secret then will I! Ceridwyn^talk _contribs ^arc2.0 01:08, 05 May 2007

Confederate States Air Force

• Still in the sandbox, just needs proofreading and an image I'm waiting on. --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 03:22, 6 May 2007 (UTC)

All done! Ceridwyn^talk _contribs ^arc2.0 03:46, 06 May 2007

UnNews:National Day of Prayer ruined by godless protestors

• Due May 8 (GMT). Normally I wouldn't do this; since I'm rarely topical I have weeks to fix a page before it appears. This, however, is topical. Plus it's late and my eyes are blurry. Grammar should be okay. Spelling, too. It's the commas that I'm worried about. Maybe the apostrophes as well. They're sneaky, those apostrophes. /me shakes fists at sky. Damn you, punctuation! --Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 11:01, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

I've had a brief look, although I must say, given the subject matter I did consider politely declining. But punctuation is free from denomination :P ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 10:13, 07 May 2007

Subject matter? Golly! I have "subject matter". Hurrah! Thanks. --Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 22:53, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

Well ok, it felt like a bit of a dig at religious folk :P Of which I am also. ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 11:12, 07 May 2007

Oh, come now. Everything's a dig at someone, when you get down to it. You're not one of them Scientolamagisticalwhatzits, now, are ya? Because they frighten me. -- Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:14, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

I know, thats why I edited it anyway :P And no, they frighten me too! I'm a Christian. But as I said, punctuation is punctuation regardless of content! Are you happy with the edits MO? Can I move it down to old articles? ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 11:26, 07 May 2007

Yes, it's good. Also, I love you. --Sir Modusoperandi ^Boinc! 23:39, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

Awww thanksx2 :) I love spending time with you too ;P (ooh burn!) Also, I have to admit, I didn't have to do much to that one. Seems the people requesting proofreading thus far aren't the ones who need it =/ ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 11:43, 07 May 2007

Invasion of Uncyclopedia

• New article, Invasion of Uncyclopedia. (BTW Ceridwyn, great idea.) -Han Solo (High Gen. Grue) Comlink Grueslayer
  • I'm on it :) And thanks! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 03:51, 10 May 2007
    • I think I might join... -Han Solo (High Gen. Grue) Comlink Grueslayer
      • Well, I think I'm done with that one, let me know what you think. I couldn't help but do a few rewrites here and there to jazz it up a bit. Hope its ok! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 04:21, 10 May 2007
        • I wrote is as an IP, which explains its crappiness. But it looks a lot better after you came in. Looks done! -Han Solo (High Gen. Grue) Comlink Grueslayer

Brazil

• Brazil, s'il vous plaît. -- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 16:45, 8 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Spagging now. -- Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 21:12, 8 May 2007 (UTC)
    • Hows it going? All done Contestant? Feel free to move it down when you are. I'll give it a quick once over as well when I get a chance! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 11:27, 09 May 2007
      • Had a good look over, nice work Contestant, looks great! Moving to completed. ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 06:56, 10 May 2007
        • Thank you all. Feel free to take some from the pile:

NeedABrain has awarded you a cookie! Now go play in traffic.

-- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 23:12, 10 May 2007 (UTC)

Thanks NeedABrain, anytime! :) ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 01:43, 11 May 2007

UnBooks:The Anarchist Cookbook

• I can't spell or any of that stuff, so you guys will probably have tons of fun with this one :) -- Brigadier General Sir Zombiebaron 23:09, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
  • I've had a go, couldn't see much needing attention tbh, a few capitals here and there but otherwise I'd say its done! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 11:21, 10 May 2007
    • Finished. -- Mitch 00:55, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
      • Cheers Mitch :D ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 01:43, 11 May 2007

Invisible cow

Just mostly finished this, not much was wrong with it. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

Consumerism

Finished this. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

Mossy coconut

Ok, you are getting desperate for new articles here. Finished. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

Aspirin

• I left some of the made up words in there, such as omnibenevolent, because changing them would have messed with the flow (and thus the funny) of the article-Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 14:06, 13 May 2007 (UTC)

Sperm: A Chronicle

• Finished two days ago. Got its pee review. More fixings would be appreciated. Cheers. It's gneomI 12:12, 14 May 2007 (UTC)

I fixed the bulk of it. Needs more review though. -- Mitch 13:20, 14 May 2007 (UTC)

User:NeedABrain/UnBooks:Gallows Humor

• Almost done, maybe just a good syntax and grammar check before I can launch it. Remember the main character is somewhat simple-minded so there are some intentional mistakes. Thank you in advance. -- herr doktor needsAV2  [scream!] 22:02, 16 May 2007 (UTC)

I got it, it needed only minor mistakes. -Han Solo (High Gen. Grue) Comlink Grueslayer

Grue Eating Habits

Done, needed minor edits. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 01:49, 24 May 2007 (UTC)

Rush Hour

Done. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 04:19, 23 May 2007 (UTC)

Raymond Chandler

Done. Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines

UnBooks:No Clean Way to Die

Done. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me! 17:48, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

You're a tank, Uncyclopedian!-Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 21:30, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

Scienticians

Revised a tiny bit to help the article flow, and done.-Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 23:21, 18 May 2007 (UTC)

Feeder

Finished, done, proofread. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

Child Supremacy

• • MINE! Its been too long >:D ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 02:20, 24 May 2007
    • Can someone else give it the once over, perhaps sprinkling a few links as you go? This article needs some serious help, I tweaked the formatting and tried to remove the endless series of brackets, but I may have missed a bit. ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 02:47, 24 May 2007
      • Yes sir, I mean Ma'm, I mean... ARGHHHHH!!!!! --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:48, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
        • Oh man, this is such a ugly article. I THINK I did it. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:54, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
          • Fixed that last misplaced comma. Done, I think. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me! 03:31, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
            • Either this, or Invasion of uncyclopedia needed the most work. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 03:44, 24 May 2007 (UTC)
              • There were similarities ;P ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 04:44, 24 May 2007

Peace Corps

• I often make mistakes that I am unable to catch and I'd rather be on the safe side before popping it on recent articles and pee review... --~

  Jacques Pirat, Esq. Converse : Benefactions : U.w.p.

  02:33, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Sure thing... Corsaire... --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:34, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Finished, minor changes... --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:36, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Thanks. --~

Jacques Pirat, Esq. Converse : Benefactions : U.w.p.

02:38, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

• Letter to the Isle (needs proofreading before finalization ASAP).

S.O.S found. Sending Rescue Plane... --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:16, 26 May 2007 (UTC)

Done. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:22, 26 May 2007 (UTC)

Somalions

• Well, I saw that Ceridwyn placed a {{proofread}} on this while prowling recent changes. Let's save another article! Unfortunlaley, I have to go to sleep soon. Even worse, it has an ICU. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 05:13, 31 May 2007 (UTC)

Untimely huff. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:39, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

REO Speedwagon

My crusade to save this article, its a new user's first article and they received unhelpful critiques and a score of 2 on Pee Review and now the article is up for VFD. Come on Comma Brigade, lets all do what we can to help save this article so this new user isn't forever discouraged! We ARE friendly and helpful really! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 01:22, 29 May 2007

Removed extra |s. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

Well thats a start! Thanks! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 02:10, 29 May 2007

Incoming! (I'm on it!) --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:11, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

Actually, it looks good enough for me to vote keep. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:13, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

Please do then, I don't want this new user being discouraged after all their hard work! ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 02:31, 29 May 2007

I... did. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:32, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

SPEEDY KEEP! --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 02:30, 31 May 2007 (UTC)

HowTo:Set Up a Party at the Last Minute

I'll be working on this one. --General Insineratehymn 00:21, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

Hows it coming along Insineratehymn? Done? ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 02:46, 02 June 2007

Did a bit more fixing up. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

Is this done? Maybe Ceridwyn can make an executive decision. It's been up a while.-Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 16:23, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Hah! I got you all! *points and laughs* --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 16:51, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Ok, put e|m|c on the blacklist... no proofreading for him! --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 16:52, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

I meant to put that up there... --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 16:56, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Good thing you guys are on top of things :P-Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 19:46, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Nazi

• Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 20:34, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

Done. --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 02:31, 3 June 2007 (UTC)

HowTo:Stop Hunger

• An old article I just noticed with poor spelling and grammar. Sir Cs1987 UOTM. t. c 13:53, 16 June 2007 (UTC)

Preflight procedures

• Proofread plz. Kthnx. --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 03:34, 22 June 2007 (UTC)

Eh, why not. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 03:36, 22 June 2007 (UTC)

The thing was PERFECT. /me fastens safety belts --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 03:40, 22 June 2007 (UTC)

Goth

I already ran it through a spell-check, so no need to worry about spelling. Please focus on grammar, repetitive words, and sentences that just flat-out don't seem to make sense. Kudos! --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 03:10, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

I can't think of a good line. Wait, I have one... YOU FOUND BELLA GOTH! --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 03:12, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

What the- THE WHOLE THING is repetitve. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 03:16, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

Will you STFU and proofread it already? --Hotadmin4u69 ^[TALK] 03:26, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

Nah. I'm too lazy. I've gotten a few articles already. your turn. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 03:27, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

I'll do it, guys. --Lord Fluffy who rains fire from the heavens 14:20, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

Is this done? Please move completed articles down once you have proofread them. Thanks. ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 06:50, 17 June 2007

I have deemed this complete. ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 04:31, 26 June 2007

Spirited Away

I put the template on, figured I'd put it here, too. I just did a Pee Review for it, and it's, needless to say, a bit of a fixer-upper. Good luck! P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon (Tick Tock) (Contribs) 00:57, 11 June 2007 (UTC)

Has anyone had a go at this? I'm a bit busy with end of semester assignments at the moment. ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 06:50, 17 June 2007

Someone? Anyone? ~ Dame Ceridwyn ~ talk DUN VoNSE arc2.0 04:31, 26 June 2007

Did a bit, still needs more. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me!

On VFD. Should we do the same we did for REO speedwagon? --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 04:29, 27 June 2007 (UTC)

Article deleted. -- Mitch 19:39, 30 June 2007 (UTC)

User:Ikabu/Alien Invasion

I'm hoping to put this into the Poo Lit Surprise. For some absurd reason. Please proofread! {Ikabu}BUZZ...FLICK...GURGLE... 11:26, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

I think that would divide any credit for the article between you and whoever contributes to it. -- Mitch 14:01, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

It will. If Mitch proofreads it, you're collaborators. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 14:02, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

Did a bit of proofreading. Marshal Uncyclopedian! Talk to me! 22:37, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

Thanks, I think that's enough. A big thank you to Uncyclopedian and WesternLotus; you're credited for it. I doubt if it'll win, but remember that you're collaborators so don't collaborate on anything else! (Agaist the rules.) {Ikabu}BUZZ...FLICK...GURGLE... 08:14, 29 June 2007 (UTC)

UnNews:Bashing your head against a brick wall discovered to have hallucinogenic effects

This article is currently on VFH, but a few sentences seemed awkwardly phrased. I don't want to lose any votes because of grammatical errors. -- Phlegm Leoispotter * (garble! jank!) 21:36, 29 June 2007 (UTC)

Brigader General Grue at your service! --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 21:40, 29 June 2007 (UTC)

Mior changes needed. anyway, I'm leaving some words I was confused about to others. --Lt. High Gen. Grue The Few The Proud, The Marines 21:53, 29 June 2007 (UTC)

Done. -- Mitch 19:32, 30 June 2007 (UTC)