Somehow this became a real article TKFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK 22:42, October 15, 2011 (UTC)
- The "Yeeeaaahhhhh. That's it." part is kind of unnecessary and possibly contradictory as it's followed by several sections of additional content, but otherwise it's a great article. —Sir Socky (talk) (stalk) GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 22:45, 15 October 2011
- I think its original purpose was more of a "that's the ticket!" bit of punctuation, but now that you mention it, it was very vague and didn't really add much. So duly noted. -- TKFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK 22:54, October 15, 2011 (UTC)
- I'll give it a go. 24 hours or so.--- TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 11:58, October 27, 2011 (UTC)
I like to write a lot of things, I’m pretty good at Pee Reviews, and I received an award Author of the Month Award and two features. Also I like Avenged Sevenfold, Modern Warfare 2, Halo 3, and brunettes and emo girls.
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Concept:
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At first, I didn't know what to think about this article. No offense, but at first I thought this was written by a noob, till I saw the article's history. I do think the concept has some potential, but wouldn't you agree that this should be renamed to something like "Comparing the Playstation 3 with my Penis" or "Why?:My Penis is like an Playstation 3". This is up to you, but I just think that a title like that would fit better with the article's concept. You do, however, did great sticking with the concept, and to tell you the truth I find the concept rather hilarious after reading it.
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Prose and Formatting:
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9
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One problem I saw was, "even if they don't look so pretty anyone" I think you meant anymore. Other than that spelling and grammar looked fine.
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Humo(u)r:
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The humor wasn't so bad as I thought it would. The penis jokes were pretty funny. However, I think there should be more jokes about the Playstation 3. It would be a good idea for the narrator to eplain the disadvantages of the Playstation 3. I was told in a pee review that I shouldn't be afraid to attack a subject for it's faults, so I believe you should do the same thing. After all, not every gamesole or game is perfect. The real problem is that the article should be expanded. I'm not saying it should be very long, but it should be long enough to expand the jokes some. The introduction does need work, so that people would be more interested in reading the article.
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Images:
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The first image is good, but it took me awhile to get the joke of it. If it had a caption I would've understand it easier, so let's add one in, shall we? The second image is ok, but you should add more to the caption as the joke the caption is giving is kinda dull. And a few more images would be good.
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Miscellaneous:
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7.8
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My overall grade of this article.
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Final Score:
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38.8
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A good article that just needs some tweaking, and I hope to see it around VFH sometime. Feel free to go to my talkpage if you have anything to say. Cheers!
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Reviewer:
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--- TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 16:11, October 28, 2011 (UTC)
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