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User:Qzekrom/Siri

Please review this article so it won't be huffed too fast. I don't really know how to improve it myself, so please. That's why this ICU thing SUCKS BALLS. And even if you bitches decide to delete the shit out of it, please move it to User:Qzekrom/Siri instead. Cute Zekrom! _{Use Fusion Bolt NOW!! • It's super effective!} 21:03, February 17, 2012 (UTC)

Update: I've moved the article to my userspace so it won't be deleted. Comments on the Siri article should go to User talk:Qzekrom/Siri. (Please don't touch the redirect or ICU the userfied article. Thanks! Cute Zekrom! _{Use Fusion Bolt NOW!! • It's super effective!} 22:47, February 17, 2012 (UTC)

Starting point - the main thing to try and do is determine your angle. I have a tendency to go for what is real about something rather than making stuff up. I had a quick flick at www.sirifunny.com/10-weirdest-things-said-by-siri/ as a starting point. One thing I liked was the thing about how to hide a body. Expanding on this could give you the idea of Siri being an accessory to murder. The idea that someone used Siri to commit murder could be expanded upon. My initial thought was Tim Cook was trialling Siri, and asked about what it would take for him to become CEO of apple. Given the popularity of Jobs Siri suggested murder... and there's the start of an article about Siri.

Also, check out UnNews:Free in-app commerce is a go on iPhone, oldest profession first to capitalize. An older article that got featured with the iPhone thingy back in the day. Pup 03:19 18 Feb '12

Look at the following images:

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How about a volcano?

Thanks! Cute Zekrom! _{Use Fusion Bolt NOW!! • It's super effective!} 03:52, February 18, 2012 (UTC)

Anyway, can you pee(r)-review this article please? Cute Zekrom! _{Use Fusion Bolt NOW!! • It's super effective!} 17:02, February 26, 2012 (UTC)

Joe at your service. Please note that I will try to make this as funny and serious as possible. |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Kemador CUN|IC Kill | 08:58, February 27, 2012 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback. Hey, maybe the S in iPhone 4S stands for Siri? Cute Zekrom! Use Fusion Bolt NOW!! • It's super effective! 02:52, February 28, 2012 (UTC)

Humour:	4	OK, some of the humour does exist, but so far it is more of a bashing of Bulbapedia's vandals, and since when is Bulbapedia got to do with iPhone? OK, I understand that this is a parody Wiki, but if you want to write something about Bulbapedia's vandals along with the serious bashing, you may want to create another article called Bulbapedia. There isn't one yet. Now go and type messages in all-caps there.
Concept:	2	The concept revolving around Siri that you got so far is horrid. In the sections of Features and The Future (?), the parts aren't just unfunny, they are also poorly executed concepts. Need I say more? But the best thing is the part about how Siri kills people. Did you get that idea from Smosh? Good. Improve this premise of the idea and call it your own.
Prose and formatting:	7	I say that the only redeemable part in the sea of horrible shit is the prose, and I say that it is the only thing that saves the entire article from being decimated- one tenth of the article being destroyed- by admins.
Images:	5	I am glad that there are images on the article. Unfortunately, two of them- vandalised Bulbapedia logo (which resembles like a poorly-photoshopped image) and the AYBABTU image, has no relation to Siri. The jokes are overused on the images. But the best one I got attention to is the two Siri demonstration photos. You need to find more of them, because they are as relevant as ever. And also photoshop them more properly.
Miscellaneous:	5	I have absolutely no comment on this.
Final Score:	23	I am fairly disappointed in this article. If you want, maybe ask some veteran writers and they can give you a tip or two on how to generate more jokes on Siri. Research around. Talk about how the battery life is shit with Siri. Watch that Smosh video on how Siri kills people.
Reviewer:	|Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Kemador CUN|IC Kill | 08:58, February 27, 2012 (UTC)