This was a bit of a tougher one for me to write and it really relies on a theme throughout. It is probably best if the reviewer has even a slight idea about evolution although I tried to make it understandable to everyone. Hope you like it! ~SirTagstit • VFH • NotM • PEEING • CPT • RotM • BFF 00:05, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
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5
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The narrative runs throughout to the point of being drawn out, its using the same joke over and over and loses humour after a while.
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| Concept:
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7
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I like the concept, its very good, however like I've just said you've really only taken evolution which isn't real in the first place and replaced it with balloon animals. You could do with some witty banter about balloons, I mean, they're balloons, they're funny in their own right. Steal Mr Garrisons Evolution theory from South Park and have a retarded fish frog monkey balloon creature.
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| Prose and formatting:
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7
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Not many grammar errors, however your knowledge of evolution is inaccurate, plants came before animals.
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| Images:
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9
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The images are very good, you've got a good balance there and they work very well, nothing to change here.
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| Miscellaneous:
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7
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At the moment its an average article and could do with some work on the humour side, but should be a good article when it's finished.
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| Final Score:
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35
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Keep up the good work.
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--—The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs) 00:11, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
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