Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Aardvarky
Aardvarky[edit]
This is my first shot at an uncyclopedia page (I know how off putting that sounds) and I've tried not to go into complete unfunny randomness and instead tried to do something more subtle which is kind of strange when you think about the concept of the entire thing.
I would love some tips and suggestions and tried my best to use my own style but I am completely open criticism as long as it's constructive. I would also very much appreciate any tips on the positioning of pictures as I tried to move it to the left but I couldn't seem to.
Anyway thanks for using your time to read this thing first and thank you even more if you've looked at my article. I'm happily to oblige to any changes. Thanks again.
Hitler's Brain On The Body Of A Gorilla On Wheels 22:52, 22 February 2008 (UTC)
- Moving pictures to the left requires something like [[Image:Example.jpg|thumb|left|text...]] Sir Severian (Sprich mit mir!)
Humour: | 3 | I didn't quite see the funny in this. Oscar Wilde is no longer En Vogue, so including him anywhere in a page these days means it's hard to laugh at. I know you are new, but we don't like him so much polluting our pages. The Nike bit didn't do anything for the article. Is there something else more famous that could be "aardvarkisting...?" maybe a symbol of the Aaardvark on Big Ben or somewhere noted for really having an anarchy movement. |
Concept: | 5 | I like the concept of Anarchy as Aardvarks, but just changing a lot of Anarchy principles to the word Aardvarky was hard for me to get around. The Aardvarky Movement, struggle against governments, the popularity in youth culture, that's really good. Maybe find some famous Anarchist and get him in the article somehow. Btw, I only recognized one of those bands. I don't think you are American, by your use of "A4 and A5 paper." Wenn du zufaellig Deutsch spricht, schreib mir. So might want to write more in the Oxford style if that is what you learned in school. If you are American or some native English speaker. We might have to talk. |
Prose and formatting: | 1 | There are no blue links anywhere in this article really. Wikify the page please. Grammar is lacking, and it could do with a quick slEpl checker run through. |
Images: | 4 | You had good images, nicely placed. Nike Image not so good. |
Miscellaneous: | 4 | You had quotes, categories, see also...maybe a template would have been nice. |
Final Score: | 17 | Remember these things take time. It only looked like you worked on this thing for two weeks and none in January, and here it is in the middle of Feb. |
Reviewer: | Sir Severian (Sprich mit mir!) |