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Sam's Empire

General of All Branches of the Military and the Head of the State Police Eric (talk) 23:26, October 12, 2012 (UTC)

Humour:	2	Starts out with Five Grand Laws, but fails to explain what they relate to. Adds a couple more laws, one of which is about somebody named Kyle, that nobody cares about. This is followed by a lot of quotes, which are easy to ignore, there are too many of them, and they do not make any point. Finally, there is a description of some sort of series of wars, which reads like a combination of a dull history book, and made-up nonsense. Nonsense is rarely funny.
Concept:	1	Articles about somebody that you do not like are a dime a dozen. There is no coherent idea holding this entire article together, nothing that the entire article is about, except maybe this Kyle guy, but we don't like reading about non-notable persons, this is vanity.
Prose and formatting:	4	The grammar is okay, and headers are used properly. However, the ideas are all over the place and do not flow smoothly.
Images:	6	Two images, both of war diagrams, neither with funny captions. Neither picture is particularly humorous in itself.
Miscellaneous:	3.3	Averaged the other scores. This article appears to largely be vanity, which generally gets deleted around here.
Final Score:	16.3	Sorry, this article does appear to be VFD material. Please move it to your userspace and rewrite it.
Reviewer:	-- Simsilikesims(♀GUN) Talk here. 03:12, November 24, 2012 (UTC)