UnNews talk:Rivers Cuomo takes on Spotify

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G'day mate (in a non-gay way). I enjoyed your recent UnNews. I too have written one. Please copy-edit and whatever else it is you do. Thanks! OnePunch Talk to me 23:46, 31 January 2022 (UTC)

Excellent and topical! I'd remove the reference to Uncyclopedia vs Wikipedia; that's in-crowd-pleasing and not generally funny. (Navelism) Also, Beatify was a brilliant ending, only you went on to spoil it by stating how to pronounce it. End with the joke! even if it's ambiguous. Spıke 🎙️23:52 31-Jan-22
PS--Are people outside of Oz supposed to know who Rivers Cuomo is? (Don't ever abbreviate to last name, even when you otherwise should, like in an UnNews headline; in the US this means the butt-grabbing state governor and his little brother in the Fake News.) Spıke 🎙️23:54 31-Jan-22

I removed Uncyc vs Wikipedia. Changed all the "Cuomo"s to Rivers and removed the pronunciation.
The only people who know who Rivers Cuomo is are Weezer fans, I'd say. Any other changes/suggestions? OnePunch Talk to me 00:00, 1 February 2022 (UTC)

Yes; again, the word Beatify was brilliant and should be the last word. After that you are merely muttering to yourself. Spıke 🎙️00:06 1-Feb-22

I see... Well the punchline for "Beatify" was to make the classic "John Lennon hit wife" joke. But okay. OnePunch Talk to me 00:09, 1 February 2022 (UTC)

Oh! A twofer! Let me at it... Spıke 🎙️00:15 1-Feb-22

Very good twerking.... I mean tweak. It was a good tweak. But yes, having Beatify be the final word is peak comedy. Glad you enjoyed this UnNews (I'm really getting the hang of this). OnePunch Talk to me 00:21, 1 February 2022 (UTC)

OnePunch, remaining comments on this UnNews:
  1. In the second paragraph, you exaggerate Weezer's popularity. In the third, you deprecate it. I don't care which, but they are contradicting comedy strategies.
  2. Note that my "Rogan...may be an anti-vaxxer" is speculative and maybe playful, whereas you had said Rogan plied "misinformation," which read like the UnNews reporter taking a side. Spıke 🎙️04:22 1-Feb-22

Contradicted? Perhaps. But the underlying joke with the large fanbase to the much, much smaller community was that nobody is switching over to Weezify and are instead, just sticking to Spotify. I have added a bit more to explain a new joke that it's because Rivers is a bad programmer (which he is to a degree — he posts on Twitter and his Discord server asking for help with coding his website) OnePunch Talk to me 05:33, 1 February 2022 (UTC)

Very well. I post-edited you to mince words and remove passives.
Meanwhile, OculusWild: Pacing! Like a routine on the parallel bars, an UnNews needs a simple, fresh dismount, which this one had. Extending it to tell the same joke a second time dulls the effect. Spıke 🎙️11:43 1-Feb-22
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