Talk:Sexual Congress
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From Pee Review[edit]
OK, this is helpful - so I throw out another article to get critiqued: Sexual Congress
- Note, I'll work on NeedABrain's suggestions in the coming week, but I get another opinion just for perspective sake? Dame
GUN PotY WotM 2xPotM 17xVFH VFP Poo PMS •YAP• 16:37, 18 January 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 6 | Maybe the text needs to be thinned a little to make it more punchy. |
| Concept: | 5 | I would better like it if you satirize some real-world organization. Maybe you can bring it closer to the congress or to SM clubs. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | You write pretty well but, as stated above, in its current version, it lacks a little more incisiveness. |
| Images: | 6 | More pics, more scandal, please. Make it NSFW as it should be. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | I suggest you to split the sections and insert more real-world satire. |
| Final Score: | 30 | Full of potential, keep on working on it, I'm sorry I'm out of ideas for new stuff you could add to it. |
| Reviewer: | herr doktor needsAcorpse  [scream!] 02:24, 18 January 2007 (UTC)
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