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UnNews:England prepares for public drinking ban.[edit]

Wanted to see what you whoever you are think. Are there any more ideas I can expand the story with. Thanks The Oblong Lobster 18:02, 9 June 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7 The humo(u)r in the second half is great, especially starting with the "second-hand drinking" comment. Perhaps throw in comments about how some people are handling the spectre of the drinking ban or some other reasons for the ban being implemented.
Concept: 9 Good concept. Just take care of the above-mentioned idea.
Prose and formatting: 7 The article needs some fixing to make it like the UnNews articles. For example, get rid of the bold-typed first sentence. Also, within your quotation marks, use Italics (for the purpose of easier reading.)
Images: 4 I'm sorry, but the image just wasn't that funny to me. If you want to continue to use it, then make a funnier caption. (Also, I'm not really sure I fully understand the shelter's purpose here.) Otherwise, I would find a different image to better illustrate the article, one that fits within it very well.
Miscellaneous: 9 Gobbilty-Goo. That's about all I know to write here.
Final Score: 36 There is a very good idea here. However, what needs to be fixed is the humo(u)r in the first half and the use of pictures. That's about all I know to suggest.
Reviewer: --Mr.Vib 00:15, 13 June 2007 (UTC)