Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:England prepares for public drinking ban
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UnNews:England prepares for public drinking ban.[edit]
Wanted to see what you whoever you are think. Are there any more ideas I can expand the story with. Thanks The Oblong Lobster 18:02, 9 June 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | The humo(u)r in the second half is great, especially starting with the "second-hand drinking" comment. Perhaps throw in comments about how some people are handling the spectre of the drinking ban or some other reasons for the ban being implemented. |
| Concept: | 9 | Good concept. Just take care of the above-mentioned idea. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | The article needs some fixing to make it like the UnNews articles. For example, get rid of the bold-typed first sentence. Also, within your quotation marks, use Italics (for the purpose of easier reading.) |
| Images: | 4 | I'm sorry, but the image just wasn't that funny to me. If you want to continue to use it, then make a funnier caption. (Also, I'm not really sure I fully understand the shelter's purpose here.) Otherwise, I would find a different image to better illustrate the article, one that fits within it very well. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | Gobbilty-Goo. That's about all I know to write here. |
| Final Score: | 36 | There is a very good idea here. However, what needs to be fixed is the humo(u)r in the first half and the use of pictures. That's about all I know to suggest. |
| Reviewer: | --Mr.Vib 00:15, 13 June 2007 (UTC) | |