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Reznov

Not my article. Gamma287 03:27, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

Humour:	1	You really need to read how to be funny and not just stupid. Most of the jokes in this article are childish or sex focused, which is not a great foundation for an article. The humour needs to be more subtle and more focused. For example: "He needed a powerful force to defeat them in world war war 2 so he recruited an unstoppable the unstoppbale badasss soldier Reznov.He gave Reznov some of his powers such as Laser Eyes to make him all powerful." is not very funny, because it's just based on rampant exaggeration. It would be more funny if you satirized elements of his character and/or the game. All the calling characters gay and mentions of kinky lesbian demons does not add to the humour at all. The second issue is that most of the article involves retelling the plot of the computer game from which this character comes from. To those who've never played it (who are most likely going to be the majority of your audience), this is unfunny and often just boring, because most of the jokes in the article rely on the reader having a good knowledge of the game. There are too many characters introduced to easily follow, and it ends up being more confusing than funny.
Concept:	3	Your article's concept can be summed up by the sentence "Reznov is badass". Whether this is true or not, it's not very funny. There needs to be more to your characterization of Reznov than pure exaggeration. Remember, the truth is usually funnier than nonsense. Look at the list of basic techniques at HTBFANJS and utilize them.
Prose and formatting:	2	This is really the low point of the article. There are a lot of spelling mistakes, and the punctuation is horrific. You need a space after each full stop, after each comma. World War Two is capitalized, and does not have a "2" in it. You need to check your capitalization at the end of lines and for names. There are also some words which are randomly capitalized in the middle of lines for no reason. Copy-edit it thoroughly.
Images:	3	First picture is OK, and I guess the videos are relevant. File:Rougesexy.jpg is really not a useful addition to the article - large, and ugly in the position to the right. Remove the "add image here" template if you're not going to add an image.
Miscellaneous:	2	Averaged.
Final Score:	11	I'm assuming you're pretty new here, so don't be disenheartened by this. Put more work into it and you'll be able to improve it to no end.
Reviewer:	${\mathfrak {C}}{\mathfrak {o}}{\mathfrak {r}}{\mathfrak {o}}{\mathfrak {n}}{\mathfrak {i}}{\mathfrak {u}}{\mathfrak {m}}$ 14:28, February 26, 2011 (UTC)