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Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Nintendo DSi
Nintendo DSi[edit]
I wrote this following up on a funny thought I had about the Nintendo DSi. It feels a little bare-bones to me, though, so I would like a review and some suggestions for expansion.
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Aethix ~ Talk|Contributions|My project 20:25, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | Finally! Not a sexist article (you guys have a hand at that...) Mind you though, there might be more features, of which you don't yet exploit the humorous potential. |
| Concept: | 8 | I'm seeing some potential. Even though it will never be a featured article in the form you're doing it, it'll be fun to read. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Try fluffing up the letter about the major threat. Try font type Forte, I always use it for handwritten stuff. |
| Images: | 4 | The "Big Bros. is watching you" should be before or instead the DSi picture. Make the DSi look evil! |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.3 | A nice read. It actually gave me some info I didn't know at first! The DSiWare seemed to be random. |
| Final Score: | 31.3 | Maybe, this is not the right writing style. make it more like the Sony director's letter. Go wicked, go insane, go dsWOW! |
| Reviewer: | Lars863 18:42, 14 April 2009 (UTC) | |
Good luck improving on your article.
P.S.
I'm Dutch, so my opinion may differ through culture. Ask a Yankee, too or a Teasipper.