This article is short and sort of work-in-progress-esque at the moment, but I would still like it to be reviewed because I wrote the main outline/theme.
—AlbinoZombie 18:06, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
| Humour:
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4
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While it is amusing in the way that it is written, nothing funny happens in the article. Dad trying to hide porn from kids is always funny.
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| Concept:
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8
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Huge potential for funny with this concept. Perhaps the child can retell a story of something that happened with his dad.
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| Prose and formatting:
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7
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I understand that bad spelling and sentence structure is deliberate, but too much can be hard to read. Some more full stops or commas would help, interspaced with the odd long rambling sentence would maybe be easier on the eyes.
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| Images:
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5
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The fat ass mom pic is kinda funny, but not the most relevant. Unless daddy wrote it while he was drunk and tried to blame it on the kid...
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| Miscellaneous:
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7
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Some sentences just sound like a regular kid and dont go anywhere humourous. Eg when daddyused to by hotwheels until he started fighting with mommy. Did he buy you present to shut you up? To keep you occuppied while he was high?
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| Final Score:
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31
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I'm sure there is great work to come when this article gets a bit longer and more jokes are added.
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| Reviewer:
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Ailuros 06:14, 27 August 2009 (UTC)
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