Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Metal Sonic
Metal Sonic[edit]
This is an article on the sonic character known as Metal Sonic. The article mainly tries to compare/confuse Metal Sonic with the Terminator storyline, and how sonic is the leader in the future who fights against the machines. I know, it does not fit the whole sonic article. But I plan to put a note into the sonic article noting how sonic fights against the machines in the future. Anyway, this article took a couple of days to go over and write. I had to learn how to do quotes, yet I still have not been able to master putting a picture in. So read it and see waht you think.--Garionepsilon 14:36, 6 December 2007 (UTC)
- ok i have a few comments at the bottom as well...and the link to guide you on how to put in pictures and other stuff
| Humour: | 6 | humor needs some work. I read that you want to do a sort of spoof on Terminator, so i would suggest you follow those movies more closely... |
| Concept: | 7 | I remember sonic from years and years ago..and i enjoyed the game a lot |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | this needs work..grammer and spelling. and i have a quick solution for you. SEE BELOW |
| Images: | 0 | had to give you a zero here..cause you dont have any...again, i have a solution below... |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | you get a 10 because you are trying..and thats the main point. |
| Final Score: | 28 | please see below |
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Okay, im going to go in order here. DO NOT BE ALARMED BY THE SCORE. You put this up for review...and we will help you make it even better..ok ?
Humor: i would suggest following the Terminator movies more closely. have motorcycles, shades, i'll be back..you know, the stuff we ALL remember about Terminator, and make sure you keep it mixed with all the stuff we liked about Sonic, Tails and the rest. The crazy high-speed loops...stuff like that.
Concept: i like sonic, sonic was cool and fun.
Prose and Formatting: ok i see you need some help with spelling and grammer. This is not a problem here at Uncyclopedia. If you are not good with that stuff, or just want someone to help out with that...just put THIS ---> {{proofread}} at the top of your page. Within a few days, someone...(probably me) will come and clean up your article..FOR FREE. you can use the proofreading service anytime you want. It's there to help writers. go ahead and use it.
Images: here is the link so you can learn how to put in images:
http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/Uncyclopedia:How_To_Get_Started_Editing#How_to_Upload_Images
and THIS link will give you loads of good info on how to do stuff
http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/Help:HowTo
I am normally much more in depth with my reviews, but i want you go put in your pictures, read the HowTo, and put in the PROOFREAD template that i told you about..i will personally proofread your article and clean it up for you. After that...go ahead and resubmit Metal Sonic to the Pee Review, and either me or someone else will give it a fair review..ok??
also, if you go to my userpage http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/User_talk:Finnius you can ask me questions or we can discuss your article and maybe toss some ideas around. Hope i helped, and try those links. AND DONT GET DISCOURAGED, all it needs is some work, but i think i have given you a good start with those links
- I intended in this article to focus only on certain parts of the Terminator films, mostly the war with the machines, and the whole sent back in time thing. I didn't intend to get Metal Sonic on bikes and with glasses, or going good and protecting sonic. And yes, I realise it needs pictures. So thanks for posting the links on how to do so. I'll look them up later, when I have the chance.--Garionepsilon 09:09, 7 December 2007 (UTC)