Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Aiden
Aiden[edit]
A page that is necessarily existent; I just hope it's good too. <talk.work.?pedia.
Aiden is being reviewed by Your Source for Fine Scented Pee And Whatever Else Comes Out Of Him |
I've never heard of this band, but I hope that won't matter... I'm on a roll reviewing stuff today. -- • <-> 16:03, 11 November 2007 (UTC)
Humour: | 5.3 | avg of all the sections.
Actually, the intro was pretty funny however (A) it's short, (B) you should've introduced the narrator to us (the 15 year old girl) and (C) you need to introduce the band to us!! (B) Remember, the main character of this article should be the 15 year old girl explaining Aiden to us. Introduce us to her. (C) It's no guarantee that we'll know what you're talking about. Please introduce the band, it's members, it's albums, and that one magazine to us.
Again, funny and the narrator becomes active here.
Above average reading affair in this section.
You lost me. You're bringing in too many different things that the avg reader (me?) wouldn't know about. What is Kerrang? Who is wiL?
Too short. You should probably merge this section with others.
Yeah, you should merge these sections. Is this supposed to be a diary? I just now realized that. I'm dumb.
Ooh, you just copied 24th July, 2006. Poor form.
Well, uh... SEE YA LATER! HAVE FUN IN NYC LOLZ! ...Is that what you want me to say? Cuz it's too damn short and it makes no sense. |
Concept: | 8 | Band idea (6=nearly adequate) + narrator with character writing on her Myspace (+2). Please give us more info on (1) the narrator and (2) the band. Don't stick so much to Emo stereotypes. |
Prose and formatting: | 7 | Adequate. Is it supposed to be a journal? |
Images: | 7 | Adequate pictures. |
Miscellaneous: | 6.8 | avg of all your other scores. |
Final Score: | 34.1 | Follow my advice:
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Reviewer: | • <-> 16:24, 11 November 2007 (UTC) |