After making changes according to the first review for this article I'm submitting it for a second one. Looking to see if it is still considered too long and thus makes the joke lose emphasis, if there are enough jokes in there to keep people amused throughout the whole piece, and how the first picture looks.
Sequence 13:53, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
- I'll do it. Rbpolsen ♦ 03:38, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
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5
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Being not especially fond of scatalogical humor, I can't say there was much about this article that I found funny. I did, however like how some of the bullshit (no pun intended) tied in with real world events and circumstances (I laughed, for example at the Ganges bit). I also enjoyed the comparisons you made (the primitive reptile to the Alcoholic, for example). The best thing you can do in my opinion is to add a lot more of that kind of humor to replace the pointless drivel.
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| Concept:
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4
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As I said, I really didn't find the concept all that funny, so considering the potential, you actually pulled it off pretty well. I'm pretty sure the only way to get this to a featured level is to do what I suggested above.
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| Prose and formatting:
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8
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I didn't personally find anything wrong with spelling or grammer. However, There are a few places were the grammatical style is weak. All you have to do it fix it up and it will be perfect (grammer-wise, that is).
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| Images:
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6
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The images aren't that good, but you did very well with the captions. Kudos. If I were you, I would request a few more images to be Potatochopped. I'm always willing to take requests, and you can go to RadicalX's Corner if you are willing to take shit from anyone. (That was a pun. I apologise.)
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| Miscellaneous:
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6
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In this case I'm rating execution / potential. As I said, parts of it were well executed, but you need to rewrite a lot of it still.
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| Final Score:
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29
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There's really nothing more to say. I hope that was helpful. Best of luck, Rbpolsen ♦ 03:38, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
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| Reviewer:
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Rbpolsen ♦ 03:39, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
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