well i'm trying to get back to an acceptable level of uncyclopedia-ing, so perhaps getting an article reviewed and doing a review of my own will do me good.
anyway, i wrote this a while back for the timeline, and i'm looking to do a few more years, but i'd like some feedback on this one before i have another go. feel free to be as general or specific as you want, and feel free to leave drive-by comments if you can't be arsed to do a full review. SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 06:50, September 26, 2009 (UTC)
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8
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This article was a quite entertaining read for an article about a year, of all things. The format of the article is limited to one-liners, and I must say, you give Modus a run for his money. I think I must be up-front about this: This article will never get featured. But you already knew that, and were probably just doing this for the sake of improving the quality on Uncyclopedia. On the subject of actual humor, you do very nicely. I found myself laughing out-loud on more than one occasion. However, when you've got as many dates as you wrote, those golden moments get a bit lost amid the filler dates. January and February were really good, but as the months went on, the laughs stopped coming as freely. The humor sort of steadily declines, with a small revival in November, but on the whole, I feel you got tired and/or out of ideas. Some minor nitpicks: You link to more than a few of your articles. Funny the first few times, not so funny by the time you crank out the NASA reference. (I realize you linked to other people's articles, as well.) Another linky thing: There didn't seem to be that many links as a whole. If you added more links, especially to other featured articles, I feel that the article would be at least marginally better for it.
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| Concept:
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7
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Well, there's not much to say here. Your article follows all the conventions of a "year" article, which is good. It is much improved over the old article, and for that I commend you. There's not much you can do with it except with the one-liners, which provide for some casual (for lack of a better word) humor. Therefore, I give you a seven.
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9
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The formatting is all done very well except for right at the beginning with the Table of Contents. There is a massive block of whitespace between the TOC and the Jesus picture. When you hide the Table of Contents, though, the issue is resolved. If there were a way for the Table of contents to be hidden when you first come to the article, that would fix it, but I don't know how to do that. The prose is done very well and never gets in the way or anything.
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8
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You use eight pictures, all formatted nicely, and one of them is even featured. The captions were all funny, but not hysterically so. They get somewhat old by the end of the article.
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8
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Magically averaged.
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| Final Score:
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40
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I feel so cheated by this article. I know that there is comedic potential waiting to burst out of your keyboard, but the "year" format limits your writing so you can only write about 60 one-liners (I think it's 59). But never mind that, you have done a great clean-up job. Congrats to you.
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• • • Necropaxx (T) {~} 03:03, Oct 4
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