UnNews talk:Curious George Sequel has been released today
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| Humour: | 4 | Um, did I miss something, because I didn't see anything funny in there. |
| Concept: | 7 | The concept is ok, I suppose, but I don't really like the way you executed it. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Prose is ok, but it is way too short. I also don't really like to many paragraphs, even if your supposed to do it with quotes. Thats just me though. |
| Images: | 3 | No pictures, but you have a request, so you get 3 points. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | I never know what to put in this box. |
| Final Score: | 25 | Seems like it could turn out as a solid unnews, but it is in a kinda crappy state right now. Get a picture, and make it longer, and add more funny. Then this would be a solid unnews! |
| Reviewer: | - UnIdiot |  | Talk | Contribs - 01:30, Oct 28
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Hey M4M! Let's get started. -- • <-> 18:33, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | "He then purposely stabs The Man in the Yellow Hat multiple times. Hospital officials report that The Man the Yellow Hat sustained eighty three blunt force injuries and three dozen stab wounds from the unprovoked attack, and is in critical condition." Oh my god. That's... That's... jesus. That's, um, not funny. I know that it was trying to be, but ya lost me in the firestorm of violence, there. In spite of that I liked the intro, which was an adequate set up for what was to come. |
| Concept: | 6 | Ambitious, because it's so obvious. The article is almost saying to us "hey, a kid's book being violent? WHAT'S THE DEAL WITH THAT??" It's very Seinfeldian. I'm being serious here: it's hard to make that idea work for longer than one paragraph. However, kudos on stringing it out. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Adequate. However, it's just a big ol' block of text (-1).  |
| Images: | 7 | Again, adequate. In other words, having just one picture is enough. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6.3 | avg of all the other scores. |
| Final Score: | 30.3 | All in all, I would say: Meh! You could make this an unbook if you devoted a lot more time to it. As it stands, however, I would basically try to polish it (as opposed to making it longer). If you tried to make it an unbook, you would have a very interesting task ahead of you. A task filled with low pee review scores for a while, but eventually, after years and years of writing about a monkey in a prison, VFH. Call me if you need anything else! |
| Reviewer: | • <-> 18:33, 29 October 2007 (UTC) | |
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