UnNews talk:Rat Poison is Harmful
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Humour: | 4 | I'm sorry but I found the humour kind of stupid and very weak. However, I feel the article may have potential. I suggest you make it into a kind of a parody of tobacco companies pretending their product isn't addictive. You could have the head of some rat poison company drink it "having a bit of a sleep at the press conference table". You could say that previous deaths from rat poison in food were blamed on terrorists and lead to George Bush invading Kentuckistan. |
Concept: | 7 | I think this concept has potential. |
Prose and formatting: | 6 | WAY too short. I fixed a lot of spelling mistakes but their might be some that Firefox spellcheck failed to pick up (especially grammar errors) so check again. |
Images: | 6 | Fine. Nothing special. The image isn't really funny as such. Perhaps you could have another of some happy, family rat poison: "Uncle Joe's Rat Poison". |
Miscellaneous: | 5 | Like I said - way too short. |
Final Score: | 28 | Good concept. Needs serious work to make it funny. |
Reviewer: | -- incompetent Ape (absolve) (Riot Porn) 20:55, 21 August 2007 (UTC) |