UnBooks talk:The Sun

Me approve of this article. --Emmzee 22:10, 4 April 2007 (UTC)

From Pee Review

I thought this was a good idea, what do you guys think? --Emmzee 13:22, 3 April 2007 (UTC)

Yeah it's a pretty good start, but very short. I don't know whether that's because it's written by a caveman or you just ran out of ideas but you could definitely extend it a bit. I like the sudden mention of sunscreen and cable TV but think perhaps this joke is used a bit too heavily in subsequent paragraphs. You need to think of a new angle if you're going to make it into a full length article. Made me laugh though, which is always a good sign.--Kelpan 16:15, 3 April 2007 (UTC)