Talk:Unclear weapons
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The title is a simple pun on nuclear weapons but I hope the article has enough in it to stand up by itself.
| Humour: | 7 | The start was boring, but it got a lot better, i mean a lot better towards the end. |
| Concept: | 8 | No joke. The concept is one of the best I've seen in ages. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | Could have been better |
| Images: | 4 | A funny photoshop or two would have been great. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | Take out the part about smelly spanish people and stuff like that, and make unclear weapons seem like they're something really scary, like the authors afraid of them himself. With the list of people at the end, make them people which the government would deliberately try to stop going on a plane, so like, a black woman, a brazillian communist and so on. Make it like the author himself actually believes that these people did what they did, which they obviously didn't |
| Final Score: | 30 | Has great potential |
| Reviewer: |  21:04, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
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| Humour: | 9 | Slow at first, but very funny with a great delivery in summation. |
| Concept: | 10 | I like! |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | The biggest fault with this article. Some minor formatting errors. See here for a quick explanation on formatting so you can clean this up a little bit (again, it doesn't need a whole lot of work). Try to get rid of any red links too. Also, your article isn't categorized. |
| Images: | 10 | A perfect ten in my book. Sure, they're not photoshopped, but the images go along great with the article. Captions are a bonus too. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | Very Encyclopedic delivery with lots of consistency. |
| Final Score: | 43 | Everything seems to tie together nicely. Good delivery, great concept, excellent pictures, but it just needs some touch-ups on the formatting. I might go as far as to suggest that I'd vote for your article if was nominated to be featured if you fixed the formatting a tad first. |
| Reviewer: | --Hotadmin4u69 [TALK] 21:06, 11 May 2007 (UTC) | |
Great piece! Here's a fun fact for you: the name of the youngest son of King Priam of Troy was in fact Paris, which makes the 'Ancient usage' section so much more funtrue - don't know if you took this into account while writing the article, but yeah... --Thandruin 20:57, 25 June 2009 (UTC)