Talk:The Justice League

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Well, it's a political humor article. I'm not done writing it, but it's sufficiently large enough(larger than any of my other works) to ask for a bit of advice for it. I'll see what I can do for pictures because I know it is lacking those. --~

Jacques Pirat, Esq. Converse : Benefactions : U.w.p.

17:43, 4 February 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	6	Sometimes it's funny, but sometimes it drags with the overly lengthy description of the characters. Bush's description was by far the funniest. "Liberalite" and "Democrite" come to mind.
Concept:	7	I like the idea; I think it could be executed a bit better.
Prose and formatting:	8	Your grammar is pretty much fine, but sometimes the actual writing came off as "clunky." For example, most of the character descriptions sounded identical with added touches. It just lacked flair... and a bit more biting sarcasm and critique could help. Maybe try to take an even more judgmental and cruel tone. Perhaps you could also make up a few detailed "story arcs" or "seasons."
Images:	0	There are no pictures.
Miscellaneous:	7	More links could perhaps be placed.
Final Score:	28	Overall, it's okay, but not that funny... The concept could be supported by a bit more political examples, references, and parodies. Maybe have a bunch of random villains based off of politicians? I dunno.
Reviewer:	-Coltonblue 18:34, 4 February 2007 (UTC)

Okay, I improved much of it - I added decent images, organized it better, added an infobox, and improved/rewrote sections of the article. --~

Jacques Pirat, Esq. Converse : Benefactions : U.w.p.

00:20, 5 February 2007 (UTC)