Talk:Rotifer

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A new member of the intentionally stupid series. What ya think?----OEJ 18:42, 11 January 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	8	"For this thankless task the rotifer earns the heartfelt thanks of English motorists and other foreigners" Sums it up I reckon- almost too subtle, but not quite. In other words, impeccably judged. There's a nice mix of semantic and lexical misunderstandings for the chucklement of the reader, but if I were to suggest anything it would be a couple more puns, since they are the most obvious humour open to this style, and we poor readers need all the help we can get. Off the top of my head, something to do with Beefeaters perhaps (a Shakespearean term for one who 'feats bees (which begs an image of a man fencing with an enormous cartoon bumblebee)) or a contrived story for how "peelers" got their name. I am, of course, sure that you can come up with something far better.
Concept:	7	I admit, I had to look up what a "rotifer" actually was, before realising it's not terribly relevant. It's an interesting idea, making the humour more inherent in the writer than in the writing, and it seems to work- on uncyclopedia this is, of course, a hazardous business, because if I hadn't read any of your work before I would have assumed it had been written by an idiot. This is rather like conceptual art in that sense I suppose, in that after a while people are going to start being suspicious that anyone could win whatever the uncyc version of the Turner Prize would be just by turning the proverbial urinal on its side.
Prose and formatting:	10	Genuinely sounds like it was written by an idiot. In the good way of course... Can't fault it, in other words, given the internal consitency.
Images:	8	Is that a Terry Gilliam animation at the bottom? It works, whatever it is, a nice bit of surrealism to point out that this isn't really serious.
Miscellaneous:	8	I have a nightmarish vision of this being NRV'd because someone doesn't get it.
Final Score:	41	Excellent writing, it lulls one into the idea that it is nonsense and then injects some unexpected wit. As I said, if there's any possible improvement it would be in tossing in a couple more of these self-evident jokes just to make the humour of the writing style more apparent. It is, of course, your call whether you think that's necessary, and you judgement is probably better than mine.
Reviewer:	--Sir Jam 22:50, 11 January 2007 (UTC)

Thanks very much, Jam, I appreciate the feedback. I built the animation from a still pic of the famous Monty Python policeman -- the only un-photoshopped frame is the female frontal one. I'll try to work in some more silly puns. You are right, I think -- the trick is reaching a kind of tipping-point where 95% of the readers will say "OK, this has to be a put-on...not even a complete idiot could write this stuff with a straight face!" ----OEJ 00:51, 12 January 2007 (UTC)

Thanks!----OEJ