From Pee Review[edit]
Well, I wrote this piece of lunacy after a hefty weekend of beer and 3d rendering which mostly rendered all of my computers useless for anything other then mucking about on the net, and since regular intarweb is a boring hellhole I ended up creating and editing a myriad of silly concepts on my userpage.
This one came out to be the most complete. It is, of course , based of of the movie American History X, set in the time around the year 0, or Emperor Augustus his reign. The amount of links an parallels that I found amazed me and I think there is a lot more subtle linkage to be found.
As always I could do with some help on, Sentence construction, typos, flow, just about anything.
—The preceding unsigned comment was added by Vosnul (talk • contribs)
| Humour:
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6
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Well done. Made me laugh out loud once and smile the rest.
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| Concept:
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9
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Great idea.
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| Prose and formatting:
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5
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Writing was alright. I removed some red links and did some random formatting for starters.
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| Images:
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7
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There were really only two, the first was a great photoshop, the second.. not so much.
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| Miscellaneous:
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7
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This article deserves a 7.
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| Final Score:
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34
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Cool ideas. Honestly, I am aware of American History X, mostly because of the curb stomp, but I've only ever watched five seconds of it. The random passerby who has not seen the movie would probably find this enjoyable anyway. Where your downfall is, as you mentioned above is sentence construction. Because I'm lazy and enjoy delegating responsibility to others, I advise you start at the bottom of the page and read the sentences backwards, discerning whether commas, words, etc are in or out of place.
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| Reviewer:
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LeatherboundbooksTalkContributions 02:06, 30 May 2007 (UTC)
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