Talk:Horn Book

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Yeah. I just created this article (my second article, but the first one I'm serious about). If you don't know what a Horn Book is, it's an alphabet book used by Puritains in the 17th century to teach them the alphabet and how to be god fearing Christians. I decided to portray Horn Books as inspired by nature and as things that must be handled with care, as well as a modern day teaching method for kids of Religious right members. If you have any ideas on how to expand it (attention: those who know Photoshop, make me a good picture!), I could use some help. Thanks. --Crazyswordsman...With SAVINGS!!!! (T/C) 16:45, 24 September 2006 (UTC)

I am going to be cruel for just a moment, to make a point. I apologize in advance.

A pernicious and evil and weak and verbose and squishy and vile and violet-scented construction that often appears on Uncyc is: "Teddy Roosevelt was known to wrestle many horned beasts in his life and he often won." He was known? By whom? Carnally known, or just regular-vanilla-flavor known? Just write "Teddy Roosevelt wrestled many a horned beast in his life, and he often won." Simpler, cleaner, more direct, and stronger.

Again, sorry. Your article is eminently worthy and the topic is a gem. I wish I had thought of writing about it. If I were you I would continue to work on it a bit. Make the prose as direct and compact as possible -- perhaps instead of "he would often win the support of many families" you might consider "the spectators loved him, and whole families -- from wrinkly grannies to toddlers in diapers -- threw roses into the bullring." Sh*t, that's not more compact, it's longer. I dunno. But it seems to me that clear images work better than abstractions. I know only two things for sure: first, that I am uncertain about everything; and second, that I don't really know anything anyways. ----OEJ 03:12, 25 September 2006 (UTC)