HowTo talk:Stop Playing the Accordion

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Humour:	10	I really can't fault it, see the Final score comment for why I think this.
Concept:	8	My comment about the "you must be familiar with the subject" articles in the final section comment covers this.
Prose and formatting:	6	Maybe move the tip over to the otherside (I may fiddle around with this myself if you don't mind.)
Images:	6	Could do with one in the Learning to Play section and maybe remove the one with the caption "You too can look like this!" or you could replace it (or disregard this comment altogether).
Miscellaneous:	7	Just clean up those red links.
Final Score:	37	The opening is fantastic, gets straight to it and those one liners are great. The middle section is good, especially the opening couple of gags about evil stores and the weight, this continues with the bit that goes "You'll be the envy of all of your friends, if you have any. If not, would you like to be my friend? I'm a 12 year old girl living in - er, anyway". The end section, although short is great again. I can't fault the structure here and I wouldn't worry about it being on the short side (overall). I had originally thought that this article would have been one of those "you must be familiar with the subject" to get it articles, but of course I was wrong.
Reviewer:	—Braydie at 21:43, 27 January 2007 (UTC)

Thanks for the notes. I'm hunting down some pictures, but my image editing skills are limited to... well, let's put it this way - the iCcordion took me about 4 hours, in which I learned to misuse the GIMP for the first time. The red links have been eliminated, and I've reformatted it slightly. El Zoof 02:02, 28 January 2007 (UTC)

I've added a new image, reformatted some of the text, *really* got rid of the red links for properly real this time, and moved the tips.

Awesome work!! I used to play the accordion way back when; now I get laid. You should put a Solar/Nuclear/Natural Gas Powered Accordian beside the Steam Powered one! --AmericanBastard 22:40, 17 February 2007 (UTC)

Feel free! That's the wonderful thing about wikis... you can get other people to do your work for you. Well, go on, go ahead, I'm waiting... --El Zoof 06:59, 21 February 2007 (UTC)