UnScripts talk:American Colonization: The Musical!
Reworking[edit]
The changes I propose were inspired by the current text (though I don't know if my inspiration was related or not, but no matter). My idea is that each listed country is going to "discover" America, one after the other. Basically, one country will land ashore and claim the land, followed immediately by another, and so on, while the Native Americans watch in disbelief. High potential for funny.
As is, the current text is too long and doesn't work to that effect. Also, while the intro is well done, it too falls outside the scope of the concept (well, it could fall within, but its a hard stretch that's unnecessary, especially with scripts that are inherently lengthy and need to immediately grip the reader). Let me know what you think. --THINKER 05:43, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- Hmmm... interesting. Actually, for the third scene of Act I, I was going to depict the Treaty of Tordesillas (where America is divided for Spain and Portugal), in which Pope Alexander VI (a nervous Italian who doesn't react well under pressure) is goaded into declaring the treaty by Cardinal Rosso (Rufus the hunchback, again).
- The rest could be in the mold of your theory, with just a minor tweak -- the first scene of Act II involves Rufus (now called Vermelho) showing up in Brazil in 1500 in the guise of Pedro Cabral (having impersonated him and stolen his ship and crew) and sets up a Portugese colony in the New World; it is subsequently attacked by the Native Americans and Vermelho is forced to make a hasty retreat. Scene two would then feature a brief appearance by Rufus as the Pope. Does that sound all right? :) The Humbled Master 16:11, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- The facts sound right. However, I don't know if I'd be very well-qualified to write a humorous piece on it myself under those circumstances. While I did well in history (and took a damn lot of it actually), this instance just isn't something that I can turn on it's ear, so to speak. Thats why I think a more simple concept (that could actually incorporate the musical element mentioned in the title) would be funnier and more accessible to people who many not know about the subject. All power to you if you can do what I cannot. Also, there may be other senior editors with better abilities in this case, and I can refer a few your way if you'd prefer to go with your arc. --THINKER 18:22, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- Well, scene two onward would go with your ideas; i.e., one country will land ashore and claim the land, followed immediately by another, and so on, while the Native Americans watch in disbelief. What sort of musicality would you put into it, however? I figured the whole The Musical! part was just hyperbole. The Humbled Master 18:43, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- Eh, I'd probably try to make it musical from the get-go.. it wouldn't be like full songs or anything, but I'd probably just describe the dialogue as lyrical (ie. Colombus: (breaking into song) blah blah etc.). --THINKER 21:42, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- Maybe in Scene Three, everyone in the Pope's Court is commanded to burts into song? Hmmm... The Humbled Master 22:24, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- Eh, I'd probably try to make it musical from the get-go.. it wouldn't be like full songs or anything, but I'd probably just describe the dialogue as lyrical (ie. Colombus: (breaking into song) blah blah etc.). --THINKER 21:42, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- Well, scene two onward would go with your ideas; i.e., one country will land ashore and claim the land, followed immediately by another, and so on, while the Native Americans watch in disbelief. What sort of musicality would you put into it, however? I figured the whole The Musical! part was just hyperbole. The Humbled Master 18:43, 23 July 2007 (UTC)
- The facts sound right. However, I don't know if I'd be very well-qualified to write a humorous piece on it myself under those circumstances. While I did well in history (and took a damn lot of it actually), this instance just isn't something that I can turn on it's ear, so to speak. Thats why I think a more simple concept (that could actually incorporate the musical element mentioned in the title) would be funnier and more accessible to people who many not know about the subject. All power to you if you can do what I cannot. Also, there may be other senior editors with better abilities in this case, and I can refer a few your way if you'd prefer to go with your arc. --THINKER 18:22, 23 July 2007 (UTC)