Talk:Eiki Shiki, Yamaxanadu
Review[edit]
Don't over exaggerate (Ex: Immortal yam, created by a deity.) because it isn't funny. Everything in moderation. Don't use conversational words like anyhow. I deleted the "General Information" since it's useless. I didn't read the whole thing, but if you did these sins of grammar, correct them. Please Don't
-Start sentences with conjunctions
-Using possessive pronouns
-Don't use conservational writing. (And then)
-Don't contract sentences that are positive. Contract in negative sentences. Examples are
BAD positive "She's a lawyer."
GOOD positive "She is a lawyer."
BAD negative "She is not a lawyer."
GOOD negative "She isn't a lawyer."
This will make your writing flow better.
Regardless
Adamwashere (talk) 02:30, January 20, 2015 (UTC)Adamwashere
P.S. If you don't get what I'm saying, contact me. (My discussion page.)